Band 8 essay sample: people resisting new technology.
Read the Band 8 essay on people resisting new technology, then a note on each criterion and one change that would make it stronger.
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- Band 8 from our checker
- 306 words
- Double question Task 2 type
What the double question asks.
Why are some people resistant to adopting new technologies? What can be done to help people who struggle with technology in their daily lives?
A Band 8 essay.
Although new technology promises to make daily tasks easier, many people avoid it for as long as possible. In my view, this resistance is usually a reasonable response to risk and constant change, not stubbornness. The most effective help combines patient teaching with services that give slower users more time.
The first reason is that technology asks for trust before it offers any benefit. For someone who grew up without screens, a payment app is a mystery: when it fails, they cannot tell whether the mistake was theirs. My uncle gave up on a train ticket app after a failed payment left him stranded late at night. When the possible loss is money or safety and the gain is only convenience, caution is rational.
A second reason is that hard-won skills are often made useless by updates. Shops and banks redesign their apps regularly, and my neighbor, who had finally learned to order her groceries online, was lost again after a single update. After this happens a few times, many people decide the effort is not worth it and become dependent on relatives for even simple tasks.
Help therefore needs to be practical and patient. Courses at libraries work best when they focus on a single real task at a time, such as booking an appointment. Learners can then practice with fake money, so mistakes cost nothing. Organizations should also keep a human alternative, such as a phone line, for those who cannot cope with an app. Above all, designers should change familiar layouts only for a clear reason, because stability allows beginners to win confidence.
In short, people resist technology when the risks feel personal and the rules keep changing. With practical teaching, a human backup and stable design, most would adopt new tools at their own pace, and society as a whole would benefit.
Band 8 essay, criterion by criterion.
Each band is the one our checker gave. Underlined in the essay: the words each note quotes.
- Task ResponseBand 7
- Both questions are answered in depth, and the writer's view is clear: resistance is a reasonable response to risk. Each reason is explained and backed by a specific example, like the uncle stranded late at night. The conclusion sums up the answer but adds no new point.
- Coherence and CohesionBand 8
- The answer moves from reasons to solutions in a logical way, and each paragraph builds on its opening sentence. Linking is mostly natural, as in "therefore" and "Above all".
- Lexical ResourceBand 9
- Vocabulary is precise and natural, for example "stubbornness", "stranded" and "hard-won skills". Only "win confidence" sounds less natural; most writers would say gain confidence.
- Grammatical Range and AccuracyBand 8
- A wide range of structures is used naturally, such as passives and clauses with when and who, and the sentences are free of errors.
One change that makes this essay stronger.
Above all, designers should change familiar layouts only for a clear reason, because stability allows beginners to win confidence.
Above all, designers should change familiar layouts only for a clear reason, because a stable design lets beginners keep the skills they worked hard to learn.
The solution now links back to the problem of updates, and "win confidence" becomes natural words.
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