Band 8 essay sample: noise pollution in cities.
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- Band 8 from our checker
- 302 words
- Problem and solution Task 2 type
What the problem and solution question asks.
Noise pollution is a growing problem in many urban areas. What are the causes of noise pollution in cities, and what can be done to reduce it?
A Band 8 essay.
Many city residents now live with a constant background of engines, sirens and drilling. This noise has several clear causes, and while it can never be removed entirely, I believe that smarter transport and planning could reduce it more than most people expect.
The largest source is road traffic, particularly in cities designed around the private car. Every additional vehicle adds to the noise, but heavy trucks and motorbikes contribute far more than their share. Online shopping has also filled residential streets with delivery vans from early morning until the late evening. On the street where I grew up, a new supermarket warehouse brought trucks past our windows every few minutes. Within a year, several families with young children had moved away.
Density is the second major cause. As cities grow upward, homes are built above bars and beside busy junctions, so the same noise reaches more people. When a rooftop bar opened above my sister's apartment, she began sleeping with earplugs every weekend. Building work is particularly disruptive, since it often begins at dawn and can continue for years in a fast-changing neighborhood.
Fortunately, most of the noise comes from sources that can be managed. Electric buses and delivery vans are almost silent at low speeds, and lower speed limits in residential areas reduce both tire noise and accidents. Planning rules matter just as much: if new apartments beside main roads needed thick windows and bedrooms facing away from traffic, residents would be protected from the start. Cities could also restrict construction hours, allowing heavy noise only in the middle of the day.
In short, urban noise grows out of how we move and how we build. If authorities focus in these two areas rather than relying on complaints from individual residents, cities can become noticeably calmer without becoming less lively.
Band 8 essay, criterion by criterion.
Each band is the one our checker gave. Underlined in the essay: the words each note quotes.
- Task ResponseBand 7
- The answer explains causes and solutions in depth, and the writer's view is clear: transport and planning can reduce most noise. Each cause has a specific example, such as the warehouse trucks and the rooftop bar. The solutions could say more about how each one would protect residents, for example how limits on building hours help them sleep.
- Coherence and CohesionBand 8
- The essay is organized around how cities move and how they build, which gives it a clear shape. Ideas are connected with natural phrases like "Fortunately" and "In short".
- Lexical ResourceBand 8
- Vocabulary is precise and natural, for example "constant background", "disruptive" and "noticeably calmer". A small slip appears in "heavy noise".
- Grammatical Range and AccuracyBand 9
- The answer uses a wide range of structures accurately and with ease, including if clauses, passives and a clause that starts with "allowing". Errors are very rare: in "focus in these two areas", the word after focus should be on.
One change that makes this essay stronger.
Cities could also restrict construction hours, allowing heavy noise only in the middle of the day.
Cities could also restrict construction hours, allowing noisy work only in the middle of the day.
The words now go together naturally, so the sentence is fully accurate.
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