Band 7 essay sample: noise pollution in cities.
Read the Band 7 essay on noise pollution in cities, then a note on each criterion and one change that would make it stronger.
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- Band 7 from our checker
- 278 words
- Problem and solution Task 2 type
What the problem and solution question asks.
Noise pollution is a growing problem in many urban areas. What are the causes of noise pollution in cities, and what can be done to reduce it?
A Band 7 essay.
In many cities, noise from traffic, building sites and entertainment has become part of everyday life. This essay will look at why urban areas have become so loud and how they could be made quieter. In my view, better transport and stricter planning rules would make the biggest difference.
The main cause is the growing number of vehicles. As cities expand, more people drive to work, and the number of cars and motorbikes on the roads have increased dramatically. Heavy vehicles such as trucks and buses are especially loud, and in a heavy traffic many drivers use their horns out of frustration. For example, residents of busy streets in my hometown often keep their windows closed even in summer, because the noise from the main road never stops.
Another reason is the density of modern cities. New buildings appear in city centers every year, and construction always starts early in the morning. In addition, bars, restaurants and concerts attract crowds late at night, so people who live nearby frequently complain for the noise.
Several measures could reduce the problem. First, governments should invest in electric buses and encourage electric cars, which are much more silent than traditional vehicles. Second, local councils could allow construction work only during certain hours and require noisy sites to use barriers. Finally, if more trees were planted along major roads, they would absorb part of the sound and also improve the urban enviroment.
To sum up, the main sources of noise in crowded cities are traffic, building work and nightlife. Although it is impossible to make a city completely quiet, cleaner transport and more green spaces would make urban life much more pleasant.
Band 7 essay, criterion by criterion.
Each band is the one our checker gave. Underlined in the essay: the words each note quotes.
- Task ResponseBand 6
- Both parts of the question are answered, and the writer's view on the best solutions is clear from the start. Traffic is explained with a reason and an example, the closed windows in summer, but density is named more than explained. The solutions are listed without saying how each one would cut the noise, and the claim that construction "always starts early" is a little too general.
- Coherence and CohesionBand 7
- The essay is well organized, with causes before solutions. Linking words are varied, and the solutions are listed in a clear order. Words that refer back, like "they" for the trees, are clear.
- Lexical ResourceBand 7
- Some less common words are used well, such as "out of frustration" and "density". A few choices are less natural, like "much more silent".
- Grammatical Range and AccuracyBand 7
- The answer uses relative clauses, an if clause and passives correctly. There are a few errors, for example "the number of cars and motorbikes on the roads have increased" and "in a heavy traffic".
One change that makes this essay stronger.
Another reason is the density of modern cities.
Another reason is density: as more people live close together, the same noise from a bar or a building site now reaches far more homes.
The idea is now explained, not just named, and it leads to a clear result.
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