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IELTS Writing Task 2 sample

Band 7 essay sample: contacting staff on holidays.

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  • Band 7 from our checker
  • 279 words
  • Advantages and disadvantages Task 2 type
The question

What the advantages and disadvantages question asks.

IELTS Writing Task 2: advantages and disadvantages question

Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

The answer

A Band 7 essay.

Band 7279 words

Thanks to smartphones, many employers now expect their staff to be available at any time, even during their annual leave. Although this can help companies to react quickly, I believe that the disadvantages of this trend clearly outweigh the advantages.

There are some clear benefits for businesses. When a serious problem appears, such as a computer system failure or an unhappy client, the person who knows the most can be reached immediately. This can save a company from losing money or customers. Some employees also like this flexibility, because they can leave the office earlier if they know they are reachable.

However, being available all the time mean that workers never truly rest. A holiday is supposed to give people a break from stress, but nobody can relax while checking work emails. Last summer, my sister has to answer messages every evening while she was on vacation with her children, and she came back more tired than before. Over time, this kind of pressure can lead to burnout, and staff lose their motivation and their efficacy.

In addition, the trend can actually harm employers in the long term. People who feel that their private time is not respected are less loyal, and most of them will look for another job when they have the chance. Replacing an experienced worker is expensive, so the money a company saves by solving a problem quickly may disappear later.

In conclusion, although constant contact can be useful in a real emergency, it puts a high pressure on employees and can damage both their health and their loyalty. Companies should definately allow staff to switch off during holidays, except in rare and serious situations.

Why this band

Band 7 essay, criterion by criterion.

Each band is the one our checker gave. Underlined in the essay: the words each note quotes.

Task ResponseBand 7
The position is clear in the introduction and stays the same to the end. Both sides are covered, with an example for each, like the sister on vacation. The claim that "nobody can relax" is a little too general.
Coherence and CohesionBand 7
Each paragraph has a clear purpose: benefits, the effect on rest, the effect on employers. Linking words such as However, In addition and Over time are varied and used well.
Lexical ResourceBand 7
Good topic phrases appear, such as "annual leave", "burnout" and "switch off". A few choices sound less natural, like "a high pressure" and "their efficacy".
Grammatical Range and AccuracyBand 7
The answer uses relative clauses, an if clause and a passive. There are a few errors, for example "being available all the time mean" and "my sister has to answer" for a past event.
One change

One change that makes this essay stronger.

Before

This can save a company from losing money or customers.

After

For a small online shop, a single quick call during a system failure can save a whole day of sales and keep loyal customers.

The idea now has a specific example and a clear result.

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