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IELTS Writing Task 2 sample

Band 6 essay sample: contacting staff on holidays.

Read the Band 6 essay on contacting staff on holidays, then a note on each criterion and one change that would make it stronger.

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  • Band 6 from our checker
  • 256 words
  • Advantages and disadvantages Task 2 type
The question

What the advantages and disadvantages question asks.

IELTS Writing Task 2: advantages and disadvantages question

Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

The answer

A Band 6 essay.

Band 6256 words

Nowadays, technology like smartphones and email make it very easy for companies to contact their workers at any time. Some employers even expect from their staff to answer messages during their holidays. Because of this, many workers feel that they are never really free. This situation is very stressfull for them. In my opinion, this trend has more disadvantages than advantages.

Firstly, there are some advantages for the companies. If there is an urgent problem, the manager can call the right person quickly and the problem can be solved in few minutes. This is useful for small companies with few workers. Moreover, some workers like this because they feel important for the company.

Secondly, the disadvantages are much more serious. Workers need to make a rest, they cannot relax with a phone in their hand all the time. For example, many people check their work emails at the beach or during dinner with their family, and this create problems at home. Furthermore, being always available can cause stress and health problems like headaches or insomnia. It can also damage their privacy life and their relationships. Also, tired workers make more mistakes after the holiday. My uncle worked for a big company and his boss call him every day of his vacation.

In conclusion, I believe that contacting workers on holidays has more negative effects than positive effects. Companies should respects the free time of their employees, because a rested worker is a better worker. It is also neccessary that the government makes clear laws about this.

Why this band

Band 6 essay, criterion by criterion.

Each band is the one our checker gave. Underlined in the essay: the words each note quotes.

Task ResponseBand 6
The answer gives a clear opinion: the disadvantages are bigger. The disadvantages have reasons and a personal example about the writer's uncle, but several points are only listed, and the advantages are short. The idea that workers "feel important for the company" is not explained.
Coherence and CohesionBand 6
The plan is easy to follow, with Firstly, Secondly, Moreover, Furthermore and Also. The linking words feel mechanical, and the disadvantages read like a list. In "clear laws about this", it is not clear what "this" refers to.
Lexical ResourceBand 5
Topic words are simple, and "workers" is repeated many times. Some less common words are used well, like "insomnia", but there are slips such as "make a rest" and "privacy life", and spelling mistakes like "stressfull" and "neccessary".
Grammatical Range and AccuracyBand 6
Most sentences are simple or joined with and, with a few if and because clauses. Many have errors, for example "this create problems" and "his boss call him". After "make a rest", a comma joins sentences that should be separate.
One change

One change that makes this essay stronger.

Before

Moreover, some workers like this because they feel important for the company.

After

Moreover, some workers like being contacted, because it shows that their manager trusts them with important decisions.

The idea is now explained, not just named.

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