Band 8 essay sample: restaurant calorie labels.
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- Band 8 from our checker
- 304 words
- Opinion Task 2 type
What the opinion question asks.
Restaurants should be legally required to publish calorie information for every dish on the menu. To what extent do you agree?
A Band 8 essay.
Restaurant menus usually show what a dish contains and what it costs, but rarely how much energy it provides. I largely support making calorie figures a legal requirement, provided the law is introduced in a way small kitchens can manage.
The strongest argument is that people cannot make healthy decisions about food they know nothing about. A friend who was trying to lose weight used to order a so-called light smoothie bowl near her office. Later she discovered that it contained more calories than the full breakfast she had given up. Had the number been printed next to the price, she would have chosen differently. Without labels, ordering is based in guesswork, while with them it becomes a real choice.
Labels also change what restaurants cook, not only what customers order. No business wants its signature dish to look like the least healthy item on the menu, so in most cases owners would rather cut portions or adjust the recipe. A burger chain in my city started serving smaller fries soon after it began listing calories voluntarily. Applied to every restaurant, this pressure would improve even the meals of diners who never read the numbers.
The main objection is cost, which would fall unevenly. A chain can test a standard menu once, whereas a family-run restaurant that changes its dishes daily would have to take an extra effort every week. Others worry that constant numbers could harm diners with eating disorders. These are real problems, but they call for careful design rather than no law. The requirement could start with large chains, while smaller kitchens receive a free calculator and more time.
Overall, calorie information gives diners knowledge they need and nudges restaurants toward healthier cooking. Introduced gradually and with support for small businesses, such a law would do far more good than harm.
Band 8 essay, criterion by criterion.
Each band is the one our checker gave. Underlined in the essay: the words each note quotes.
- Task ResponseBand 7
- The position is clear and careful: yes to the law, but with help for small kitchens. Each idea is explained and backed by a specific example, like the friend and her smoothie bowl. The answer to the cost problem, a free calculator and more time, could be explained a little more.
- Coherence and CohesionBand 8
- Ideas flow without many linking words, because each paragraph grows from its opening sentence. Phrases like "this pressure" and "These are real problems" tie the ideas together.
- Lexical ResourceBand 8
- Word choice is precise without being rare, for example "guesswork", "signature dish" and "nudges". A small slip appears in "take an extra effort".
- Grammatical Range and AccuracyBand 8
- The answer uses a wide range of structures naturally, including "Had the number been printed". Errors are rare and small, for example "based in guesswork".
One change that makes this essay stronger.
A chain can test a standard menu once, whereas a family-run restaurant that changes its dishes daily would have to take an extra effort every week.
A chain can test a standard menu once, whereas a family-run restaurant that changes its dishes daily would have to make an extra effort every week.
The word partner is now natural, so the sentence reads as fully accurate.
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